Sunday, May 20, 2012

poem 8b


Child of Rage- Dramatic monologue
When I found the baby birds, my new mommy told me
Not to play with them, because their mama wouldn’t
Want the babies if they were touched by somebody else.
Sometimes I think I’m like that. Like nobody wants me
Because Daddy touched me until I bled.
I still have those nightmares of me when I was one
Year old and Daddy falling on me and hurting me with
A part of himself.
And even though my new mommy and daddy tell me they
Love me, I don’t care. ‘Cause I know it’s all about being strongest.
Daddy was the strongest. That’s why he hurt me.
If you want to be the strongest you have to know
How to get rid of everybody that stands in your way. That’s why
I’m going to kill Jon.
I know he’s my brother but I’m the strongest so he has to die. Plus
He’s annoying. Mommy and Daddy are annoying too. They always
Tell me what to do, and I don’t like it, so
I’m going to kill them.
At bedtime they lock my door shut tight. They’re afraid
I’ll get out and hurt them and Jon. They know I want to kill them
At nighttime because I don’t like them seein’ me do it
But they can feel me do it.
My mommy and daddy are always making me
Mad. Like that one time when I was hitting Jon’s head
On the concrete floor in the basement.
I heard Mommy’s footsteps in the kitchen. Coming
To stop me. I couldn’t hide it ‘cause both me and Jon had blood
On us. Mommy is always stopping me from doing stuff.
She yells at me when I take her pins and poke
Jon and the dogs and kitties. I always poke a lot
Not a little bit.
There was one time I stole the knives from the kitchen. I was talking
To Mommy about them. “I don’t know where they are”,
I said with a smile. But I had them. I needed them so I could kill
Jon and Mommy with them.
And daddy.
They make me so mad.
That’s why when she wasn’t paying
Attention to me I went back to that bird’s nest. And I snap snap snapped
Their necks.

5 comments:

  1. Love the conclusion!! I cringe a little when you say "I still have those nightmares of me when I was one
    Year old and Daddy falling on me and hurting me with
    A part of himself." and it makes me wonder whether or not you would have had that memory at 1 year old. I get more and more involved as the poem continues. It was very creative.

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  2. Love the conclusion!! I cringe a little when you say "I still have those nightmares of me when I was one
    Year old and Daddy falling on me and hurting me with
    A part of himself." and it makes me wonder whether or not you would have had that memory at 1 year old. I get more and more involved as the poem continues. It was very creative.

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  3. If anyone was wondering this is who the poem is about.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ME2wmFunCjU

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  4. wow, this poem is powerful and REALLY disturbing! damn. The video is really disturbing too. The first sentence is great because it is so unassuming and it makes the second sentences punch hard. The whole poem has great development and inertia. I think the language you used works well too. Great poem. I am probably going to be thinking about this all day...

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  5. I made myself clear in class, I think. You really aced this one. You use the image of the birds as an effective framing device, and so many of your line-making instincts are really strong.

    Dave

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